I have been learning to put detail into my writing I use high level word and verbs,noun, and adjective. I learn to not put in the same words. I know not to put trash word into my writing. The good part is to put high level word into my sentence.

The Race Day

At last it’s the last day of the Olympics. We are doing the hurdles and we a doing it under water. I want to get a shiny gold medal and become undefeated champion. I jump into my magnetic swimming suit. I breathe in and breathe out I had heap of oxygen.  Next minute  I was waiting for the amazing awesome Olympics to start. I struggle to hold  the gigantic grey powerful rock. People were beating me so I stood up and tried my best. I was doing it for New Zealand I was dashing past and I was coming first. I float back up I heard thousands of people cheering for me. It sounded like a standpipe running through Africa. I couldn't stop smiling like a circus clown face because I came first.